Children, composition and a 12-24
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    Children, composition and a 12-24

    by Dargan » Mon Dec 03, 2007 11:33 pm

    Looking for comments on composition. This is not really rule of thirds, but I am trying to use the depth of field of such a lens and provide an image that leads the viewer to explore the image. I have cropped the image, it was taken on a D200 12-24mm at 20mm at ISO 100. I cannot retrieve the other exif info.

    Interested in any views as to how I could have improved the shot.


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    by avkomp » Sat Dec 08, 2007 11:37 am

    I dont mind this.

    is a clever use of this lens.

    as far as improving the shot,
    perhaps find a background that doesnt include power lines and
    that doesnt have the bright sky also

    the flash has reached the girl but not the boy so if you were going to shoot this shot @ this time of the day you maybe needed a 2nd flash, say behind the girl to light the boy also.

    or perhaps shoot it earlier in the morning when the sun was lower in the sky and both were lit by soft light, or find a seesaw that wasnt in full shadow
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    by heartyfisher » Sat Dec 08, 2007 12:24 pm

    Cropped and cloned out the wires and the old one step photo fix in Paint shop pro. Then upped the saturation a bit.

    A soft box to the right would be nice or bounce the flash off a large piece of stirafome (Sp?) placed 1-2 meters to the right and slightly behind you could have a similar soft effect.

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    by bindiblue » Sat Dec 08, 2007 12:45 pm

    I do like this shot,, and also like how its been PP , well done to you both
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    by Dargan » Sat Dec 08, 2007 9:01 pm

    Thanks for PP. When I get hold of CS3 I will go back to this. I agree with all comments.
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    by abat » Sun Dec 09, 2007 9:14 am

    Here's another go at PP. I started out trying to replicate Heartyfisher's edits (which I liked) in PS as a lesson for myself. I then went on to add a few more of my own. I wanted to keep the original framing as I like the detail in the dress and it makes the most of the super-wide angle.

    This is what I did:
    . Levels - clipped the white point to lighten up the face. small adjustment in black point to give a bit more contrast.
    . Saturation - selectively added saturation to the red channel to warm the skin tones and blue channel for the dress. Just a touch more yellow for the grass.
    . Cloned out the pole and wires (pretty roughly)
    . Lightened the boys face a little
    . Boosted contrast a little with curves
    . Selected the sky with the magic wand and darkened it a little.
    . Flattened and sharpened a touch.

    Phew.

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    by Dargan » Sun Dec 09, 2007 11:41 am

    Magic :)
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